Once more, the fact that Kagome chooses to wear such a dirtied piece of apparel in public astounds me. I'm really quite glad that Sesshoumaru finally removed it. Now if only he would burn it with his acids~
It's a good plot. Good idea. Very simple. Though, I feel that it is rushed, all three of them. If you took just a bit more time and planned out the events better, perhaps things would flow better. At least, this is how I feel.
The ending was very sweet. Though, I don't see it in Kagome's nature to leave her friend Ayumi behind just like that.
Overall, this threesome was very pleasing to my palate, however I would enjoy more detail in the future. Thank you for this piece.
Awwh, this series is so cute! I'm really glad I looked at them.
The only thing I can think of to tell you is maybe put the chapters together? Not necessarily into one big chapter, but three separate chapters under the same title? I don't know if what you were going for was the threequel effect or anything, but it's a little easier to find in regards to reading. Anyways, I really liked this. =D
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