Really good, a few typos here and there. Nothing a good beta can fix! ;)
Lizzie (Chapter 3) - Tue 16 Dec 2008
Its really good but you might need to work on editing if you want i could edit for you my email is punkgurl4ev@gmail.com
Jasmine (Chapter 2) - Mon 15 Dec 2008
| i luv it buh make it longer
| YAY im youre first review!!! ^_^
Anyways youre doing pretty good for a first timer!! I also am a first timer, but I have yet to finish my story and put it up.
Anyways so far so good!! Keep going, I am looking forward to more chapters!!
^_^
Youre friend,
Kitsune Serene
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