This is an interesting story. I get the gist of wat you're conveying, but it needs editing. Sesshomaru is called "she" numerous times and in the beginning it read as if Kagome stumbled upon the cave, but near the end, you say that Sesshomaru saved her. Pair all this with the personification of the storm and it's very confusing.

Loving where this is going but the she/he mix ups are definitely confusing 

I'm slightly confused. I think some of the He/she have been mixed