I have sufficiently spent 3/4 of my work day reading your stories when i should be planning my lessons and I have not an ounce of guilt about it. This one is by far my favorite so far.
Sage, this was such a pleasant read :D I know this it's a simple one-shot but it really did take me by surprise.
It wasn't just Sesshoumaru, you know. It had to be blatantly said before I knew Kagome was training. And, like Sesshoumaru, my dumb ass thought someone was abusing her! Honestly thought it was going to take a dark turn, but I'm so glad it didn't and I love the unexpectedly cute plot twist.
And this part got me laughing out loud:
----“I wanted an excuse to spend time with you.”
He stares at her.
And stares.
And stares.----
Like, he just couldn't even XD
Faith (Chapter 1) - Wed 25 Nov 2020
Great story! I love how she keeps letting him stew in his curiousity until he can't stand it anymore.
Just one small correction. Where you use the word perceptible, I think the word you intended is susceptible.
As a human Kagome is susceptible (vulnerable to) injury. Perceptible means "noticeable"
Tiffany (Chapter 1) - Wed 18 Nov 2020
I love your stories, this one is no different.
The only thing I would say to you is to watch your grammar tenses. You switch between present and past and from the way that you write, it seems like it should be in past tense.
Other than that, keep up the good work.
-Tiff
Mecca (Chapter 1) - Tue 17 Nov 2020
Another awesome oneshot, I loved that Sesshoumaru was absolutely clueless, and their little conversations building up to their final confessions. I always love seeing how they are doing in the future, complete with pups! Thank you for sharing :)
Very cute, but short. Thank you for the light hearted story.
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