Hello,
what a prologue! You did well, rev! I was so excited to read this.
I absolutely loved the beginning! And I think that was even the strongest part of this chapter. You described Kagome's inner side very detailed. Her being overwhelmed and confused and all tbise movements, lights and sounds were just too much! I liked how you played with the syntax too. I could relate to Kagome because of the way you wrote this scene. Fantastic!
Sesshoumaru was super sweet with Rin and handled Kagome surprisingly well. I really see him being a good listener too. He kniws when to ask a question and when to shut up. He was so sweet supporting her and making her feel good by reminding her that she is more than a title. And he is super smart. I think so far he is the only one asking why the well opened again. And it seems that his "bad feeling" about it is going to come true.
It was also interesting to hear some of his thoughts. Okay, I loved that he tried to reach the moon when he was younger and failed. LOL
The constant change in POV is something I will have to get used to.
Inuyasha is being weird and I can't figure out why. I mean yes, she was away for a while and things bound to be awkward at the beginning. But he does not want to touch her at all or is not even trying to be near her as in standing next to her. Something is going on, maybe another love interest?
Great first chapter, Im looking forward to your next update!
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