Hello,
what a sweet first chapter!!! You did well for your first time!
I liked how you tried to "mislead" your readers at the beginning. The licks and laughter were a surprising and cute turn. The transition between those two parts was perfect!
I also liked the background story you came up with. The inuyoukai custom to "run the moonlight" is a very interesting concept and plays well with Sesshoumaru's crescent moon on his forehead.
Miscommunication is a part of every relationship and I believe that it would be even more present in a human-youkai-relationship. I was glad that Kagome took it upon herself to invite him to a "run" and confront him with her question and insecurity! It was a nice touch!
The interaction between those two shows how much they love and cherish each other. SessMama gave the whole chapter a humorous moment at the end.
I'm looking forward to the second part.
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