VS (Chapter 1) - Sun 07 Jul 2019

Hello,

it has been a while since I read a Cinderella story, so I'm really excited for this fic! The way you worked so many canon characters into the first chapter is just amazing! And yes, I noticed the stuffed toad youkai plush. ;)

Since Rin and Shippou are her kids, I'm wondering if Sesshoumaru and her are already together or if she is going to meet him in the book? After all there is a reason why she got sucked into the book. And Kagome did say that she always imagined finding her prince when reading this story...There are so many possibilities!!! You see, I'm already excited. LOL.

There is one point I think you could improve in your writing, and that are the transitions. Your writing kind of disturbed the flow of the story. Focus on them when writing the next chapter and I'm sure you will master them soon enough and will see the difference with your own eyes.

I'm looking forward to your next update!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 1) - Wed 03 Jul 2019

This story is very interesting, please update the next chapter quickly!


hana sora (Chapter 1) - Wed 03 Jul 2019

keep it coming


nicole (Chapter 1) - Wed 03 Jul 2019

I like pkeasp continue


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