I like you're idea for this story! It makes up for Sesshoumaru's lack of responsibility in Inuyasha's education and want of a family of his own. I understand your reasoning in Inuyasha's behaviour, it's logical if one thinks about it and your take to remedy his predicament (desire to be part of a united, loving pack, his need of Kagome's presence as a constant support) is interesting. I'm on the opinion that Inuyasha unconciously strives for his brother's approval, even when he constanty denies it. His long lasting resentement towards him makes me analyse he hates him for his dissmisal as 'family'. I would love to see were all of this will go, and ohh! I'm super interested how this new little family will fare on the future! And the reactions of the Higurashi family! Yep, I'm looking foward for more long chapters!! <3 Keep the hard work!
Haven (Chapter 2) - Thu 06 Dec 2018
I can't wait to read more!
This is an interesting one, I usually see others turn Inuyasha into a child. I'm really anticipating the next chapter.
Awwwo only one chapter so far...it was getting good
VS (Chapter 1) - Fri 23 Nov 2018
Hello,
your summary really piqued my interest! I like the concept of this story! :) And Kagome and Sesshoumaru being the parents will force them to spend a lot of time together. ;) I'm looking forward to all the arguments they will have. :P
There are quite a few things that are kind of bothering.
- For example the declaration that Inuyasha is only 5 years old in mind ... that is just not believable and convincing.
- You let him keep his memories through the transformation and only changed the size of his body. That means that his behaviour is not affected because of the transformation. Yet, he is having a tantrum, lashing with his claws out at Kagome, crying and sleeping with her in her sleeping bag. That is clearly not consistent with the way he behaves. It just doesn't match up. You have to decide here: Did the transformation affect his behaviour, or not? You can't mixe them up.
Otherwise an interesting concept. And I'm looking forward to your next update!
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