All I wanted was a little something to pass a few minutes of time. So I read this and instead wound up going through a rainbow of emotions in a span of three minutes.  
  
I find your description of her emotional state incredibly deep. Either you've felt the real, soul crushing depression (not the "I'm sad for a day" bologna) that can do real damage to one's psyche, or you've known someone on a very personal level that has suffered it. That's the only way I can describe how well you wrote this first chapter. 
  
This is a very good start! I look forward to reading what comes next.  
      
A very promising start.  I like it very much.  Please continue. 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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