my heart is still beating very fast! I was so afraid for Shippo!!! From a tactical point of view the well is really no good place for hiding. The poor guy has no way to escape there on the bottom of the well. I'm wondering why Inuyasha sniffed him out and why Shippo is not allowed to talk about it with Kagome. The small fox must be really afraid of him.
And when Kagome was picking the carrots I was pretty sure that it will NOT be Shippo who is hiding in the bushes. I was actually thinking that it would be Inuyasha stalking her. And that she may be in danger! Turns out it is little Rin.
My poor heart!!! You did an amazing job with this chapter and you had me all the time on edge!
Hello,
the way you describe everything is just amazing!!! I always feel like I'm there myself, and instead of reading your story on the screen, it feels like I'm seing everything with my own eyes!!!
The beginning was just hilarious! Kagome was not so successful in playing the role of a stupid, naive girl :) Sleeping while the stove next to your room explodes ... - really? :D
And Shippo is as always the adorable, mischievous little fox! I just want to cuddle him :D
I'm really curious to see how the next meeting with Sesshoumaru and Kagome will be ... and I have a bad feeling about Inuyasha ... let's see where you will be going with this work of yours, so far you have done an amazing job!!!
I'm looking forward to your next update!
This chapter was beautiful
This is beautiful. Your descriptions are spot on and help build a clear image without excess. I look forward to reading more
I got to admit I didn't quite understand your summary. But I am glad to have clicked it. Congradulations on your first chapter! It was interesting, funny, and curious. With that lovely hint of a flora of mystery, and left questions, and answers desired. Hope you get to write more.
YES!!!! I NEED MORE OF THIS STORY
VS (Chapter 3) - Sat 12 May 2018
Hello,
I have to say your writing style is lovely!!! I cannot explain why exactly, maybe it's the way you describe things, or the way you are able to continue the story without answering questions, instead you are opening more and more questions and the further you go the more interesting it gets...does that make sense?
Anyway it should be a compliment!!!
I like the way you always come back to the colours brown, green and blue, they connect your chapters! And I adore Shippo, so I'm happy to see that you include this mischievous bundle of joy in your story!!!
Your last chapter had me really smiling - it must be indeed very difficult to hide a kitsune, no matter where you are ;D
Though your last chapter was extremely short, are you going to do drabbles now?
I look forward to your next update!
such a lovely begining. although now she is picking up kitsune trouble. :)
Marie (Chapter 2) - Wed 09 May 2018
I am totally enjoying your story brief so far but allot of info and details. Please update soon
Beautiful, very descriptive and catching can't wait for the rest ????
I am intrigued...nicely written first chapter.
Looking forward to next chapter.
Thanks for sharing.
Cheers!!!
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