Reviews for The Lost Prince by natasha

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Lorena (Chapter 6) - Wed 20 Jun 2018

I hope I didn't review twice in the same chapter,lol. I always assumed that Sesshomaru and his mother are the only white inu's alive, but maybe there is another? I'm trying to picture if his mother would be stalking in the trees tbh, but I have no thoughts...it felt like a low priority to me because I'm so obsessed over future Kagome×Sesshomaru interactions and the arrival to the castle, but it was obviously important enough for you to add it to the story so now I'm curious 


Loveyaa (Chapter 6) - Sun 08 Apr 2018

Quite an interesting tale you got yourself here. I like the life lessons you got Kagome to instill in Takashi, so much so that he stands up to his stronger father with them. There are some grammar mistakes throughout, but you've still got a nice flow to the storytelling. I can't wait to see what happens next :)


Emily (Chapter 6) - Tue 03 Apr 2018

Great story! I always love a story with Sesshomaru ‘s child bringing Kagome and him together. I enjoyed that he gave her the kimono and talked about the mark. Can’t wait for more!


Mkd94 (Chapter 6) - Tue 03 Apr 2018

Great story!! I can’t wait to read what happens next! Keep up the great work :)


PriestessElena (Chapter 6) - Tue 03 Apr 2018

I love this story! I've read a couple that has something similar to this but Kagome seems so independent here and i love it! keep up the good work!


princess of the western lands (Chapter 6) - Tue 03 Apr 2018

Great update. So now things will be a bit different between them. How will Inuyasha explain his leaving his pack and staying gone for so long? Will he be let back into the group or pack? Will things continue to progress with Kagome and sesshomaru? What will his mother do when they get there? 

 

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


beachvilla (Chapter 6) - Tue 03 Apr 2018

Fun story!  Can’t wait to see what happens. 


SammyJams (Chapter 6) - Mon 02 Apr 2018

Sessh got told! hopefully this is the start of a better relationship!


Jennie Duong (Chapter 6) - Mon 02 Apr 2018

Awe loved the mother and son bounding <3 glad Sesshoumaru is being nicer, what will happen when inuyasha comes back?


Nallely (Chapter 5) - Mon 26 Mar 2018

Love this!!! I loveee Takashi ando can't wait forma more, hope you keep going.

 

I also think that the line story is really good. Nice job.


Lorena (Chapter 5) - Sun 18 Mar 2018

!!! I can't believe I'm just reading this! I really love what you've done here, it seems like both Kagome and Sesshomaru are true to character,  so it'll be great to see how the story continues~ I also love and appreciate that Takeshi wasn't deprived of his demon instinct while he was with Kagome, it's points that stack in her favor, becaubecause you can't help but wonder what could've been had his mother's plan worked or had Sesshomaru raised him alone


kyoandyuya (Chapter 5) - Sat 17 Mar 2018

Thank you so much for the new update! I adore Takashi so much!


roberta. (Chapter 5) - Fri 16 Mar 2018

I just wanted to add DONT listen to to so call advice of other "writers" your story is fine in tempo if they can do better tell them to write their own story!! YOURS IS JUST FINE!!


roberta. (Chapter 5) - Fri 16 Mar 2018

Love this puppy he is opening his father's eyes. Looking forward to next update

 


princess of the western lands (Chapter 5) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

Wow. Sesshomaru's coming to the point where he knows it's either accept things or loose his pup. I wonder what he's getting from the seamstress? Does he really think that takashi will accept the royal treatment while his mother and pack are relegated to servants or humiliated as they're spat upon by everyone in the castle? Will kagome accept the gift or apology from sesshomaru after being disrespected many times? I wonder how the rest of the week will go and will sesshomaru's behavior improve. Can't wait for his mother's reaction when they show up at the castle. 

 

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


Annie (Chapter 5) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

I am so loving Takashi.  He is taking care of his pack better than Sesshomaru. 


Makuro767 (Chapter 5) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

Word of advice from another writer, re-read your work before posting to be sure of the grammar and spelling. Or use any kind of applications or program to help with either. The story is pleasant although a little rushed here and there, but it is intriguing nonetheless. I would suggest more events that show the depth of the bond between Kagome and Takashi because there is where I feel the most rushed. This story is good but it feel to me more like rushed draft than polished work. As a writer, I feel that it insults the very core of the story to simply post without at least re-reading and polishing the story. I am not belittling your work, but I feel improvement could be used in this fields.

As for the story, it is intriguing and fun. I am looking ahead for better presentation of the story in the foreseeable future. Do not let my honest criticism put you down, take it as it is; an honest advice from another writer.

Also, I would really like that people would stop making it seem as though Sesshoumaru have split personality disorder between him and his baser instinct. It is naturally your creative license to do as you pleased with your story but the more I read about this sort of interaction between him and "his beast", the more I feel like 'tsukkomi' Sesshoumaru to get a psychiatrist.

Again, this is just my honest opinion. And please use Daiyoukai as opposed to Taiyoukai since the former mean Great Demon and the latter mean Demon Fish. There is several essays by older members of the site regarding the matter and it is pet peeves for Dokuga lovers. This include the "the beast" matter. Again, creative license but I always believed that a long and honest review sparks motivation and imagination better than a simple "great story" or "next chapter please" kind of review.


waterwomen1414 (Chapter 5) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

I really enjoyed how well written this chapter is, and the basic truths you included. Good job, I really do look forward to the next chapter.


Jennie Duong (Chapter 5) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

Awe I love how Takashi is so protective of kagome :) mama’s boy <3 hopefully Sesshomar stops being a butt; is inuyasha going to return?


waterwomen1414 (Chapter 4) - Thu 15 Mar 2018

You might want to go back over this chapter there is several misspelled words and some words that dont make any sense at all but I do like the progression. 


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