nice: can you please post next chapter?
not so nice: This story is so promising and I would REALLY like to beg for the next chapter @.@
Abogoh (Chapter 1) - Wed 21 Feb 2018
I like the story but it’s too blocky.. maybe split it up?
Mulata (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Feb 2018
Good change! On the other version I couldn't particularly understand a thing about alphas and omegas and such. I thought it was a great idea to explain the universe you are writing on the first chap! This version is neater and easier to read. Thank you!
Jean (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Feb 2018
Great story, looking forward to future chapters.
Can’t wait to read more!!!! So awesome!!!
I definitively liked the first version of this story, but I will state that it did not flow smoothly. This revised version seems to not be as jumpy. I like the story premise, and I hope to read more chapters soon!
I am excited for more as this was on of my faveroit unfinished stories.
Miss C (Chapter 1) - Tue 20 Feb 2018
I look forward to you completing this story.
Like the new direction this is tsking, you might want to go back and edit though as all of the 'thoughts' weren't marked and very confusing.
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