Mutnodjmet (Chapter 1) - Wed 21 Feb 2018

Have you ever thought about expanding this cute story into maybe a short chapter story? A kind of a backstory also.

I think it would be great to see how their relationship turns out and of course Inuyasha's reaction to it. 

Also like why did Inuyasha bale out on Kagome with their date.

Just a thought....

 


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 1) - Wed 21 Feb 2018

Another sweet bit of fluff involving my favorite and sometimes complex couple, Sess and Kagome. ;)

I enjoyed reading it. There were perhaps a couple of very minor grammatical errors:

The first one:

                  “C’mon, Sesshomaru-kun, we’re wasting time 'stood' here talking to random little girls.” 

I believe the word 'stood' should read as 'standing'.  (This can be found in para. 10)

The second one:

                    His vaguely annoyed glare and raised eyebrow at her reaction prompted her to laugh gently, a slow smile forming on her lips as she felt the embarrassment from earlier fade away and a warm feeling of joy envelope her.

I also believe the word 'envelope' should read as 'enveloped'.  (This is in the very last paragraph)

 

I know some readers may probably think of pointing out the errors as nit-picking or petty but sometimes the misuse of words can sometimes change the outlook of what is being conveyed in the sentence or paragraph. I'm not very good in explaining things, so, I hope you know what I mean. This is meant to be constructive criticism and not a flame; other than that, the story was excellently written.

Thank you for sharing.

Cheers!!!


KShadeslady (Chapter 1) - Mon 19 Feb 2018

Oh! Sweet! Sweet! I do love a bit of fluff! Thank you very much.


roberta. (Chapter 1) - Fri 16 Feb 2018

Cute.like it


Buttercream (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

Good story. I am glad that Sesshomaru had lefted his date and ended up with Kagome. I would love to read what happens next after their date.

 


Angela (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

aww this was cute! what a nice one for your first story here :)


Nicole (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

That is a delightful story. Thanks for sharing it!


Chie (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

Aww, this was cute!!! And I loved the banter, banter gives me life. ;)

(Low-key though, tbh, I would've also loved for Kagome to take herself out on the date because YEEES GIRL! lol)


zodiak023 (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

awww I like this just what I needed on vday when I have no romance in my life so cute! I love how she turned the whole bad day around and went anyway. that's positive thinking at work for ya.


Cheyanna (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Feb 2018

Awwww! So cute!!!! can’t wait to read more:)


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