HUH?! What the heck? What happened to Kagome? I'm so confused! Does this have to do with the curse?
On a side note, about 3/4 of the way down, while I was reading, I noticed that one of the paragraphs is all messed up. it was confusing for a bit. try fixing it.
great story by the way. very inventive.
mmmk
this confused me:
Empathy welled in Kagome. She reached out and held the wolf demon as she began to sob. Letting out all the bottled emotion she hadn’t wanted to let out.
Sesshomaru.
Kagome reached out for her mate. She needed his reassurance and comfort. Nothing came.
“There you go. No more tears. Inuyasha is an idiot. But at least you have something good to come out of it. Your baby. If you don’t want to Inuyasha never has to know. It can be just Kagome reached out for her mate. She needed his reassurance and comfort. Nothing came.
“There you go. No more tears. Inuyasha is an idiot. But at least you have something good to come out of it. Your baby. If you don’t want to Inuyasha never has to know. It can be just yours you know. A piece of yourself.”
And so did the end. Who was she running from, wasn't it Sess that was holding her? wth! *wiggles update bribery c0okie at you*
I love this story so far. Please update soon. I cant wait to see what happens next. I hope that when Sango and Miroku tell Kagome and Sesshoumaru about the curse it does not effect their relationship. I hope that they can find a way to break the curse and fall in love for real. Anyways great job so far. I simply love this story.
LMAO he's so not good a subtle =x aweosme update! smut in a hall<3
Kitty (Chapter 1) - Sun 12 Sep 2010
More please!!
OH MY!!! Ayame finally shows up at Sesshomaru's castle. I can't wait to see when she finds out that Sesshomaru's mate is actually Kagome. I wonder what's going to happen when Inuyasha finds out he got Ayame pregnant. I bet he'll blame Kagome for everything. Ooooh, so excited for this one. Love, love, love!
I'm sorry I forgot to review the first time around, but anyway I love it! I bet you could turn this into an actual book if you put your own characters in it and changed it just a bit like take out all the Inuyasha bits. Sorry I'm not all that great at putting my thoughts into words; thats part of the reason why I have trouble writing anything longer than a one shot. Sorry I believe I'm rambling. Well anyway I love the plot, the whole story :). Can't wait for the next chapter!
WOW. This is one of the best storylines I have read in a while! If I may offer a teeny critique though...for a plot this involved, it seems that the story is moving too fast...I know how it is when you want to get your ideas down fast enough so you don't forget them, but in my opinion, (and that's all this is, an OPINION), it's almost as if you're giving us a brief overview of the story.
But I really and truly love this. I love how you are telling both Midoriko's story and Kagome's at the same time, and the Inuyasha/Ayame thing...refreshing!
Thank you Kirai! Please, keep up the good work!
Sakuramaru
P.S. - I thank R0o-chan for getting me here...she suggested your story as a great one to read, and she was right! :)
oh noes! the bond is gone b/c of the bebe? or maybe its b/c soon the female pains start in so the bond is weak. !@! *wiggles update bribery c0okie at you* that was a good update btw!
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