Utsukushi tenshi (Chapter 5) - Mon 30 Jan 2017

I liked the new turns of this story...but i suggest you should put more colorful words to give more vivid details that's what going on in the story, as it will fully help your readers to picture the events in their thoughts for example from the scenes of this story: kagome called  out to the dog and she commands 'heel',idk if he instantly transformed after the command because he spoke suddenly, instead here in this part you should insert something magical or enchanting happening while he transforms into his humanoid form such  as swirling of his youkai aura and kagomes family would felt the magic and their faces like in an awe reaction after his transformation because it's modern time and youkai and magic are merely a story for them and didn't exist. And i want to know..in the anime inuyasha can't see yuras hair only kagome could..and in here sesshomaru can see it too?

I like your story and i believed you have a potential to become a good author. Don't stop writing. I will look forward to your next update. Good luck!


SilverInu93 (Chapter 4) - Wed 18 Jan 2017

Great  story i was laughing at the situation best ever!


Utsukushi tenshi (Chapter 4) - Wed 18 Jan 2017

Well i like how your story get turned and not entirely followed the whole episode of the series, i would suggest that you should add and mix some new stuffs in this story while following the series, that would be wonderful. And there's more i would like to suggest that you should put some separators when you want to jump in another moment of the story,use some indicator to separate a different situations such as this ex.------ or ××××× any symbol of your choice. Second don't skip some words or sentence even tho we have already done watching the whole series still you should not skip a word coz every word is important it give us clear details  of the story it also give us vivid picture of how the story playing in our thoughts not just popping up somewhere so that your readers would not be confused and lose where they are. I hope you got me because English is not my native tongue im not good with it. Well i like your story and i will wait for your next update.xoxo


cassandra (Chapter 4) - Mon 16 Jan 2017

Pretty awesome so far.  I like that this is different than other role reversal stories. I think it's cool how inuyasha and sesshomaru are around each other so much now.  There is bound to be some comedy going on there.


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