I love your portryal of everyone and all the description. It's very well written a little mispelling but that might be the auto-correct fault.  I hope your still writing =) 

I rather enjoyed it.  Each one shot is like reading a whole story in bits and pieces.  Not a bad way to start and it certainly is keeping me hooked. ^_^ I look forward to any other one-shots or stories that you post. ^^