this is truly a fantastic chapter.  conplex and captivating!  Please continue, don't let this just sit on the wayside.

What a great start! I'm very excited to see where this will go. also, very well written first chapter. please update soon! 

Very very interesting! I'm curious to see what happens next!

Oooooohhh what a fresh concept! Can't wait for more! 

I like the introspect into their lives and society. Please do continue I look forward to the next chapter.

I can't wait to read more of this. I love the concept of the story and await for more of it. Keep up the amazing work!!

 What a cool start. And such nice twists. Can't wait to see where this goes.

I love it  please continue 

Great story so far! Well written with very minor errors. I love your idea, very unique and has me waiting for upcoming chapters. Keep it up!

Now this is different. I have never read anything like this before so far. It sounds like it's gonna be good. 

I actually like the concept of this story. It is refreshingly different. It is very well written. I am not a beta nor am I proficient in my grammar but I think I only found very little grammar errors that did not take anything away from your story. I look forward to future updates and I like your take on the character of my fav...Sessho. Your writing skills are good thus far, are you sure you even need a beta. lol