well looks like Kagome might get over her dad abandoning her quickly enough... He never mentioned having kids?? thats bad....

The story as such is interesting, but needs a lot of work with sentence structure and paragraphs, as it is now it reads more like a bulletlist or a draft, the short sentences makes it choppy and hard to read.

In many places the sentences are cut short and split into several sentences that feel incomplete and would have been better of combined into a single sentence, for instance:

"Kagome sensed Inuyasha coming there way. She stood."

This becomes choppy and the "She stood" feels detached and incomplete.

"Kagome stood as she sensed Inuyasha coming their way."

Would feel more complete and give a better flow, each time you end a sentence by putting "." it created a break in the reading which can make it feel choppy.

"There" refers to a location "over there", "their" refers to individuals "their way" (related to "our way"), a common gramar mixup.


Or

Miroku and Sango had got married. She recently had a pair of twins.

They were a boy and girl.

Sasuke and Shizuka.

 
This would also do better as a single paragraph, two, or maybe even a single sentence.

As an example:

Miroku and Sango had married and Sango had recently birthed twins, their son Sasuke and his sister Shizuka. 

LMFAO whats the story with this lush!?

I love the story so much !! 

Please update next chapter and i'll be waiting.

Hope Sesshomaru & Kagome happy ending ???? 

OK a little confused here.

Great chap like that sesshy took under his wing.

Made a few errors of my own. That should be what and your. 

I waited to read all the chapters before I reviewed for the first time. First, you have a very interesting story here and I hope you finish it. Now for a bit of the other...you do need to work on your grammar and sentence structure. Also, you need to learn how to write your thoughts and moments into paragraphs. Short choppy sentences are distracting and easier to read when you arrange each idea into a grouping. Spelling was pretty good with only a few errors and those can be attributed to auto correct, so go back over wat you've written and edit it or get an experienced beta reader. Good luck with our story. If you polish up your writing a bit, it will be a gem. Cheers!

Wow, I actually didn't expect that to be Sess's connection to Kain, I figured he'd be another Lord... Cool story so far!

Oh okay so kagome is black inu. Like that moma is a miko to and powerful. Interesting

Woah, go get Kagome's mother from the future, now I'm really intrigued as to what is going on.  Was her mother always able to go through well? What secrets are about to be exposed? 

Please update again soon.

Gret update a

This is getting interesting. Please continue.

I disagree with anom the way you wrote this was perfect. Too many use  unnecessary filler words going in circles. Write your way and let those who think they can do better write their own story.

Such a captivating story. Looking forward to seeing more.

As an idea it's nice, but it needs some work, as it is now it reads more like list or a basic draft/guideline than a story.
Longer sentences, more descriptios, more words pretty much.

I think this is a good start. Please continue.