I really like this story so far, and I can't wait to see where you take it next. I did notice you havea couple of recurring mistakes throughout the chapter. You often forget to put the or a in front of words.
For example you have this sentence: ‘’Is it not true that your father has another son? Son he fathered with human princess? Was not your mother cast aside in favor of human princess?’’.
It should be: ‘’Is it not true that your father has another son? A son he fathered with human princess? Was not your mother cast aside in favor of the human princess?’’
Mona (Chapter 1) - Tue 24 May 2016
Different but great. I wonder where Sesshoumaru will wake up at ????
Please update again soon.
Rhonda (Chapter 1) - Tue 24 May 2016
Really like the premise of this story. Just the idea of Kagome herself being the darker half is interesting enough.
Really looking forward to reading mire of this story.
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