I like the suspense of the story.....and I want to see where Sesshomaru's interest in Kags will lead. Will he only be interested in her as a potential powerful soldier or something more? I hope you continue the story.
I love the plot. The story is quite different from all the other stories I've read. Love the portrayal of kagome and Sesshoumaru and I hope to see how they will develop with the story. I hope to see you expand this, it has great potential. Thanks! :)
(Chapter 1) - Wed 01 Jun 2016
Hmm...Interesting. Quite an intereting story you have here. Sesshoumaru seems unusally cruel, but it would be interesting to see how Kagome handles it. I think a sequel would be in order. Lets see who breaks who first. I hope that there is a next time with this story :)
(Chapter 1) - Tue 12 Apr 2016
Actually what a good oneshot but I would love to see you expand upon this. More pllease!
Gahh! This was amazing! Please continue! I especially loved Kagome's fierce protectiveness over Souta and Kikyo, and Sesshoumaru's obvious sadism. I can't wait to read more if you continue it! xx
(Chapter 1) - Mon 11 Apr 2016
Omg! You have to ask if you should continue?! PLEASE!!!! This is magnificent! I love a complex and cold Sesshoumaru!
Your stories always rock!
Duh. I vote more! Like a five year old with a chocolate addiction, I need more!
OMG I freaking love this!! Please!! Please continue!!!!
YOU HAVE TO CONTINUE!!!!! This is to good to be kept as a one shot!! I need to know what happens!!!!
(Chapter 1) - Sun 10 Apr 2016
How can you even ask if we want a continuation? The answer is always YES! But I hope he doesn't corrupt her. Kagome's true inner power would come out and soothe the beast hahaha, I can see it now! Aww man, it's like watching a movie in my head. He's never bound himself to a miko before and doesn't realize the binding effect her soul will have on him, to dedicate her life-service to a person instead of a place, it could wreak havoc on both of them...so many wonderful things could happen...my mouth is watering.
This was the first story I've read of yours and I look forward to reading the others now! Thanks for this :)
(Chapter 1) - Sun 10 Apr 2016
Oh please continue. I want to see what happens next while Kagome has to serve under Sesshomaru.
Although I love all your stories this one shot was enough for me.
Oh my god.. no next chapter!! I cant click it lol. . Please give it a try, this sounds good. . Your other story too, but this story really promise a dark and sweet torture (maybe i'll get a hot lemon too) ;)
Continue! By all means!
(Chapter 1) - Sun 10 Apr 2016
|Wooow..! Such an interesting story Stardust Miko-san! It's fresh altought I must grimaced with how dark and cruel you potrayed Sesshoumaru.. But it can be fixed by Kagome's influences of course! Hohohoho...
Well... I do have some suggestions for the sequel/continuation.. Like what if you throw Inuyasha in the story.. I imagine he is (and always) the cast-out Prince of the West.. Kagome was like 15 in the start.. Then she started her Miko training, then she met Inuyasha in the process. She befriended him and shared all of her condition to him. He swore to kick his brother's ass someday.. At 18, she completed her training, and became The Secret Weapon of the West or something like that.. But her attitude never changed.. Her purity still shone bright.. She even helped some Sesshoumaru's injuried soldiers and heal them. That displeased him. He thought that some of his 'mission' for her will darken her heart, so he did her first punishment (and her brother too).
Her second punishment came from her secret relationship with Inuyasha.. They fell in love at each other but Sesshoumaru felt she was belonged to him (and he didn't realise he actually already developed some feelings for her). He beaten her, but her brother and Kikyo were being fled by Inuyasha (because Inuyasha practically still a Prince of the West, Sesshoumaru couldn't sentence him to death, he could punished him but he couldn't take the life of his sibling). And to save Kikyo further, Inuyasha mated her (reluctanly at first, 'cause he in love with Kagome), made her (and Souta) imune to Sesshoumaru's further punishment ('cause they are practically 'family' now).
Even after her second punishment, Kagome still didn't lost her light, much to Sesshoumaru chagrin. He then came to the last resort, He forced himself to her. She fought him at first, but couldn't do further under his might. Several time in the night he wishpered to her how Inuyasha 'betrayed' her by taking her sister. That did the trick. Raped and betrayed she lost her last light and became hollow.. She became what Shesshoumaru wanted at first, a killing machine, a doll for him to do whatever he wants.
But in the end it displeased him more. Reluctanly he admitted that he missed her lively demeanor, missed her fire.. Even when he take her again and again only to saw if it would rouse her fighting spirit, it failed. He became frustrated inside. Between his sprouting feelings for her and the need to preserve his dignity and his disgust for a mere human, he then send her to a difficult mission far away.. On the way, she found out that she was pregnant. Scared of what kind of fate befallen her unborn child, it snap her out. Her fighting spirit came back, then she chose to flight (she could mask her smell and cloack her presence).
After 5 years with no trace of Kagome, Sesshoumaru became hollow inside. Until there was a rumour about a silver haired demon child, with one blue eye and one golden eye. He followed the rumour. And found out Kagome and the child that actually belonged to him. Enraged that he forced to parted with his own child he prepared to attacked Kagome. Much to his shocked, Kagome challeged him. She knew, whenever he found her, he would made her take her third punishment. She told her child (the names...hmmm what I have in my mind is Ginsenmaru 'The Perfect Silver Arrow') to stay and watched, what kind of demon his father was....
Well.. that is the story I have in my mind.. sorry for my bad English.. ^^;
Please tell me what your opinion!
Wow. This is too good to remain as a oneshot. I really like it and now I hope to read more of it. Please continue it. ^_^
Damn. Sesshomaru really fits his name. P.S, Did Souta really steal something? It would be pretty twisted if it turned out he had been at the wrong place at the wrong time. I mean he didn't even get to explain what or why. Poor Kagome, the training is going to be harsh.
(Chapter 1) - Sat 09 Apr 2016
Too epic to end that way.
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