Cute! Please continue, i wanna see where this goes.
I think this is really interesting there are some words missing in some sentences but other than that I think this story has great potential. I think I will be really great. I really liked how Seshoumaru was debating on if to tell her she's got something on her tooth or not, cause we all do that in our daily interactions with people.
ja ne till next time and keep up the great work
Zeelian (Chapter 1) - Sun 07 Feb 2016
Has potential, needs a bit of proof reading, and "Canon" isn't really the correct tag for it.
Keep it coming. .seems interesting :)
Not bad. There were some "little annoying" grammatical mistakes, but nothing alittle proof reading won't fix. =) A little editing will make a smooth reading for the readers! Very interesting storyline, indeed. Please continue!
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